Showing posts with label badly needs an editor. Show all posts
Showing posts with label badly needs an editor. Show all posts

Monday, May 23, 2016

"The Girls of Atomic City"

The Girls of Atomic City (Denise Kiernan)



I had high hopes for this book, but I didn't make it past page 40; despite the fascinating story it's attempting to tell, the book is undone by two flaws. The smaller is that the author jumps around too much, attempting to juggle 8 women's lives; limiting the book to 2 or 3 would have been a big help.
But in the end I'm not sure this would have made any difference as what what really dooms the book is the author's inexcusable over-writing. In Kiernan's world, coal can't just be burned; instead the energy inside "could be released in dreamy blue flame and bestow its power on its liberators". The entire book is written like this, and it becomes incredibly annoying extremely quickly. The passage that finally drove me to give up is the author describing someone's hair:

She wore her dark brown hair parted on the left, undulating tousles washing past her prominent cheeks, ebbing again at her gymnast's shoulders, before landing with a final bounce at the top of a spine that exhibited the kind of impeccable posture grown out of a lifetime of grooming and horseback riding.

If you made it through that whole disaster of a sentence without gagging a little bit you're a stronger reader than me. Or as the author might write: The reader's eyes washed past the horribly overdone prose, his interest ebbing at the tiring text, before his desire to continue to read the book landed with a final thud as he tossed the book in the donation pile.
Take a pass on this one.



Grade: F

Sunday, November 15, 2015

"The Secret Ministry of Ag. & Fish"

The Secret Ministry of Ag. & Fish: My Life in Churchill's School of Spies (Noreen Riols)

I'm really torn about this book; the author's story working in SOE during World War II is very interesting, but the book really seems to need a good editor. The raw material of the author's story is fascinating and she has a great voice, but it reads like a tape recorder was put in front of her and she told a bunch of interesting stories; I think the book could be vastly improved if it was set in chronological order, or at least had a stronger main narrative. As it is it's like spending an afternoon hearing the author reminisce, and while that's no bad thing, in its current form I ended up reading it in an afternoon and then forgetting most of it.

Grade: B

Friday, March 20, 2015

"Kushiel's Dart"

Kushiel's Dart (Jacqueline Carey)

A big fantasy novel about a courtesan who's tossed into a high-stakes world of political intrigue in late medieval fantasy Europe. For the first 300 pages or so this was really hard to put down; Carey's great at world-building and weaving exposition, and the world she's made is pretty interesting. Unfortunately the book eventually slows down and starts dragging, hamstrung by two issues, one big and one small. The big one is that it's simply too, well, big - the paperback comes in at a hair over 900 pages, and it's not hard to suggest some useless parts that could be cut (my recommendation would be the entire Master of the Straits storyline, which not only adds almost nothing to the story, but feels very out of place having a super-powerful wizard in a very low-magic setting). The second issue is that the characters are not always fleshed out as much as one would hope; our heroine and the main cast mostly come off pretty well, but the head antagonist is barely more than a sketch.
All in all, I guess this is a good beach book, but it's hard to really recommend seeking it out unless you pass it on the shelf at the library.

Grade: B

Sunday, February 15, 2015

"Elizabeth"

Elizabeth: England's Slandered Queen (Arlene Okerlund)

I didn't really enjoy this book; mostly it made me want to re-read Allison Weir's the Wars of the Roses, a historical event that takes up about half of this book, and quite honestly the more interesting half. The parts that are actually about Elizabeth are ultimately doomed by the author stopping quite frequently to defend Elizabeth's reputation; While these parts do sound convincing to me, I had barely heard of Elizabeth before reading this book, and the author introducing arguments against Elizabeth to then refute them started turning into a real drag. I appriciate the author's attempt to rehabilitate the reputation of "England's Slandered Queen", but I'm afraid it doesn't make for terribly interesting reading, and I'd probably recommend steering clear of this one.

Grade: C

Friday, January 30, 2015

"City of Ambition"

City of Ambition: FDR, La Guardia, and the Making of Modern New York (Mason B. Williams)

I feel bad giving this book a negative review, but I found that my attention kept drifting while reading it. It's a little difficulty for me to put why that was into words, but it seems to boil down to the book's main theme getting quite muddled. The opening material, sketches of FDR and La Guardia, is pretty interesting, and I enjoyed the book during this part, but when the author starts running through a detailed history of the politics of New York state in the interwar years, it's just not very gripping. I would suggest the author either needs to take a higher level overview of this material or dive in even deeper and really fill out the history; as it is, the level of detail has the reader see a lot of characters come and go without making much of an impact, and it turns into kind of a muddle. It also stirs the dreaded "Why am I reading this" feeling - I can't help but feel that a lot of the pages in the book could be condensed down to "La Guardia was in the political wilderness for a few years" without following the fruitless narrative thread about what the ultimately meaningless mayors and governors of New York were doing at the time.
For all that, though, I don't think this is really a bad book - it's just one I didn't personally enjoy. It's a bit tough to recommend; if your local library has it, I'd try the first hundred pages (I made it to 125).

Grade: :/

Wednesday, November 26, 2014

"The Greenlanders"

The Greenlanders (Jane Smiley)

I feel bad not being able to get into this book; it's got excellent reviews, but when it came time to actually crack it open, I barely made it ten pages. I've read that it's supposed to be in the style of a Norse saga, but for me I just found it to be horribly dry, written in snore-inducing this happened, then that happened style. Here's a little taste (page 233):

Another thing that happened after this hunger was that Bjorn Einarsson Jorsalfari declared his intention of remaining year round at Thjodhilds Stead, which was in Kambstead Fjord, at the back of Hvalsey Fjord, instead of spending part of the year at one farm an part of the year at the other, for he hadn't enough men to make something of both farmsteads, and he preferred the location of Thjodhilds Stead, for it gave his ships easy access to the sea but also to Gardar and Brattahlid. For this reason it happened that Gunnhild Gunnardottir would be within a day's walk of her own home when she went to stay with Solveig for the summer...

Did you follow that? I didn't, because I fell asleep halfway through it. Maybe I've just read too many fast-paced novels, but it takes so long for anything to happen that I couldn't stop my attention from drifting away. I'm sure a more patient reader can find a lot to enjoy here, but for me it's going regretfully in the donation pile.

Grade: D

Tuesday, July 1, 2014

"Snow Crash"

Snow Crash (Neal Stephenson)

I really hated this book; it has the William Kennedy style of writing where it sounds like an annoying person at a party you can't escape yammering nonsensically at you, with Stephenson's twist being that it sounds like you've been cornered by a 10 year old boy who can't shut up. Here's a quote from the first ten pages, talking about the hero's car, which goes, like, a billion miles an hour:

The Deliverator's car unloads that power through gaping, gleaming, polished sphincters. When the Deliverator puts the hammer down, shit happens. You want to talk contact patches? Your car's tires have tiny contact patches, talk to the asphalt in four places the size of your tongue. The Deliverator's car has big sticky tires with contact patches the size of a fat lady's thighs. The Deliverator is in touch with the road, starts like a bad day, stops on a pesta.

I made it through maybe 15 pages of this crap before it was hurled into the donation pile with great malice. I don't know that I have much to add beyond that horrible quote. I guess I would say - do not buy this book; do not check out this book; do not recommend this book; do not read this book.

Grade: F-

Tuesday, June 10, 2014

"Lincoln at Gettysburg"

Lincoln at Gettysburg: The Words that Remade America (Garry Wills)

I'm surprised at how little I liked this book. Honestly, I don't know how this won the Pulitzer; it's about a fifth very technical dissection of the Gettysburg Address itself, and the rest is a wandering hodgepodge (I found myself flipping page after page of information about then-contemporary cemetery design philosophy). Some of this is interesting - the author's rundown of the two hour long preceding Gettysburg Oration went into a lot of detail about public speaking in the mid 1800s that was surprisingly interesting.
But this is the exception - most of the non-Address material is both boring and puzzling in that I'm not sure why it was included. I almost muddled through the whole book, but then I started running into this (from pages 116-117):

Psychobiographers, as we have seen, claim that this demonstrates Lincoln's oedipal compulsion to "kill" Douglas as a sibling rival.
I don't really think I need to say any more than that. Don't bother with this book.

Grade: F



Sunday, May 25, 2014

"Under the Loving Care of the Fatherly Leader"

Under the Loving Care of the Fatherly Leader: North Korea and the Kim Dynasty (Bradley Martin)

I'm torn about this book; it's divided roughly into thirds, with one being very good, one being interesting but dry, and one being pretty boring and pointless. The first third is a biography of Kim Il-Sung, covering from his birth up to his son taking over most of the power in Korea, and this part's easy to recommend as the author gives a interesting and informative history of both Kim and the development of North Korea. After this the book goes into the second section, which is a large batch of interviews with defectors. This kind of primary source is pretty interesting at first, but between the sheer volume of them and the fact that the author just presents the interviews without any kind of narrative thread eventually made me start skipping pages. 
This comes to the last section of the book, which I just recommend skipping; the author speculates on the future of North Korea, and it seems like the book's editor didn't read this far as it's quite disjointed. A large part of it also deals with the question of who will succeed Kim Jong-Il, which was a good question in 2006, but has been answered pretty definitively at this point
All of this makes a book that's difficult to recommend. I would say get it out of the local library, read the first half, and return it.

Grade: B

Friday, April 25, 2014

"On Such a Full Sea"

On Such a Full Sea: A Novel (Chang-rae Lee)

I really wanted to like this book, and for the first 70 or so pages, I did; The setting of a ambiguously radiated future where Western civilization has declined seemingly more of malaise than anything else and been largely replaced by Chinese settlers is really interesting, even if our heroine doesn't have much of a personality.
The problem is that eventually I would like the scene to be set and the story to begin, and this never really happened. The author is unable (or, I suspect, just unwilling) to actually tell the story; for each page of our heroine's journey out in the wilds, you'll get a page about the city our heroine left, and while some of these are interesting, I eventually became deeply annoyed at cutting away from the main plot to meander through four pages about the weird uncle who used to live upstairs. By the time I was a third of the way through the book and realized that the plot was never going to be able to pick up any momentum this way, I bailed.
I'd recommend checking out of the library and going about 100 pages; if the author's elliptical style and refusal to get to the point aren't driving you crazy, you're set.

Grade: C-

Sunday, March 30, 2014

"The Diary of Edward the Hamster 1990 - 1990"

The Diary of Edward the Hamster 1990 - 1990 (Miriam & Ezra Elia)

I guess I didn't get this book; it's about a sad hamster who (spoiler alert? I can't even tell, it's in the title) dies at the end. It's not funny or entertaining; it's puzzling and depressing. The whole book I was like "Is this supposed to be funny?" and then I got to the end and went "What?" and then "Was this supposed to be funny?"
Don't even bother getting this one of the library.

Grade: F

Tuesday, February 25, 2014

"1491"

1491: New Revelations of the Americas Before Columbus (Charles Mann)

I feel a little deceived by this book. What I was expecting was a book all about the people native to the Americans before Columbus. There is some of this material in the book - and these parts are quite good - but more than half of the book is a history of white people's understanding of the history, not the history itself.
This is not exactly what I wanted. I understand that some material about the way that modern people think about the subject can be useful, but there's just too much for me, and it really started getting on my nerves reading page after page about it. I want to hear about the history; I don't necessarily find it so interesting to be hearing about the theory and ways of thinking about the history. (It also has the effect of once again making the story about white people.)
Ultimately, I just found that there was too much of this material in the book. What parts of it that there are about the Americas before Columbus are quite good, but there simply isn't enough of this to make this an easy recommend. Check it out of the library and just read the parts that are directly recounting the history.

Grade: B-

Thursday, January 30, 2014

"A History of Future Cities"

A History of Future Cities (Daniel Brook)

I knew I was in trouble with this book right from page three:

Orient is both a noun and a verb - the noun means east; the verb means to place oneself in space - but its two meanings are intertwined. An individual lost in the wilderness can place herself in space (orient herself) because she knows the sun rises in the east (the Orient). The disorientation imparted by St. Petersburgh, Shanghai, Mumbai and Dubai results from their being located in the East but purposefully built to look as if they are in the West. Their occidental looks are anything but accidental.
What we have here is a misleadingly titled book comprised of four not terribly well written, hyperbolic, boring histories of "pop up" cities - the aforementioned St. Petersburgh, Shanghai, Mumbai, and Dubai (putting aside that Shanghai is over a thousand years old and Mumbai may have been continuously inhabited since the Stone Age). I'm gonna be real here: This is a book not only without a central premise, but as I hope is demonstrated from the snippet above, soaked in nonsense. The actual histories themselves are, and I know I said this already but it bears repeating, not well written and boring. I can't recommend not reading this book enough.

Grade:
F-

Friday, January 10, 2014

"Vulkan Lives"

Vulkan Lives (Nick Kyme)

I really hated this book. It's nominally about Vulkan, leader of the Salamanders, one of the neglected groups of characters in W40k. I thought this would be his chance to shine; Instead, the book is more about John Grammaticus, the annoying gary stu from Deliverance Lost and Legion. Like these two books, this one is a boring, annoying disappointment. I'm at the point now where when I see the name John Grammaticus I might just put the book down, because there's never anything interesting that happens when he's around. This book is no exception, and does itself no favors in being split into three narrative threads (Vulkan in captivity, John Grammaticus fucking around, and the Isstvan V dropsite massacre, which has been depicted four or five times by now). There's at least one thread left dangling where we're told that Vulkan must die to prevent him "becoming the gatekeeper" (I'm not sure where the keymaster is) that is never explained or explored at all. For bonus points, the end of the book is confusingly nonsensical and appears to conflict with what we've explicitly been told earlier in the book. Avoid at all costs.

Grade: F

Sunday, January 5, 2014

"In the Balance"

In the Balance: An Alternate History of the Second World War [Worldwar, Volume 1] (Harry Turtledove)

I think I'm being trolled with this book; it's a retelling of World War II where Earth is invaded by very slow lizard aliens, and as the author kept stopping to drive home how slow the lizards move and react, all I could think about was how slow this book moved, almost as if it was written by one of the lizards and published without going through an editor. The only reason that humans have any chance against the aliens and their advanced technology is due to this slowness, which the author repeats endlessly just in case you didn't get it the first time. This does not exactly make for a gripping read.
I forgave the other Turtledove book I read for being bloated because it had a strong narrative thread, but here Turtledove follows around way too many characters, half of whom have no reason for us to waste page after page watching them (here I'm looking askance at the minor league ballplayers and the frankly racist depiction of some captured Chinese peasants). I wonder if the problem is that this is the first volume of a four volume set; The author seems to feel no need to resolve any storylines he starts, nor give them much forward momentum, instead indulging in endless noodling and the repetition mentioned above. It's a shame - this is an idea with a lot of possibility, and  I feel like there's a decent book in here, maybe if all four volumes were trimmed down to a single 500 page novel. As it stands, I can't really recommend this one to anybody, unless you're having trouble going to sleep.

Grade: D-

Friday, December 20, 2013

"My Indecision is Final"

My Indecision is Final: Rise and Fall of Goldcrest Films (Jake Eberts & Terry Ilott)

Well, I tried with this one; I made it over a hundred pages without giving up, but bowed to the inevitable put this down to read another Warhammer 40000 novel. In brief, this book suffers from the same problem as The Secret History of MI6: all the most interesting stuff is left out in favor of page after page of turgid organizational detail. In this case we get tons of ink spent going over the boardroom moves and financing deals of putting a picture together, which is interesting for a little bit, but by the time we get to the exhaustive details of setting up four separate credit pools for the company to draw on, I had checked out. It's a shame; Goldcrest was part of some great movies, but The Killing Fields gets maybe three total pages, while there's at least five pages about how the company that owns Goldcrest Films is set up as a personal trust of the so and so family. This book is practically unreadable; there's a good story in here somewhere, but it's buried deep under a layer of thick, soupy financing deals. Might be good to read when you're having trouble going to sleep.

Grade: D

Saturday, November 30, 2013

"Lenin's tomb"

Lenin's Tomb: The Last Days of the Soviet Empire (David Remnick)

I've heard it said that "the plural of anecdote is not data", and this is what I kept thinking while reading this book. It's kind of a mess; Remnick's narrative history pieces aren't in order, and the 2 - 3 page anecdotes he keeps dropping in feel totally disconnected from the surrounding material. I could see this book working either as a straight narrative history or as a collection of essays, but the length of the anecdotes didn't really work for me, and between that and Remnick's jumping around, the book never really cohered into anything interesting. There's no thread or premise holding the book together, and I dumped it after fifty puzzling pages. Avoid.

Grade: D-

Monday, October 21, 2013

"The Rise and Fall of the British Empire"

The Rise and Fall of the British Empire (Lawrence James)

I'm not sure what to make of this book; On the one hand I was never bored reading it, but on the other it's tough to recommend. I think the problem really just boils down to scope. The author has set himself quite an audacious task here, and I'm sad to report that it falls a bit short, on length if nothing else - chronicling the rise and fall of the worldwide British empire is a massive undertaking, and even coming in at over 600 big pages, what you have here is mostly a very high-level overview. Subjects like the Raj that could take up entire volumes themselves are distilled down to under 200 pages. The result is a good, but unfortunately shallow; I would recommend this as a first read before seeing which parts of the history described whet your appetite, then looking for books that cover those areas in more detail.
Now, to be fair, aside from not getting enough of it, what you do get is pretty good; its brevity (well, relative brevity; it's still massive) keeps the book moving very quickly. The only other complaint I can muster is that there are a few bizarre errors in the text - numerous typos, words left out, and my personal bane, quotation marks that begin and don't end, as well as one case where there's a set of ending quotation marks without a beginning. Add this all up and you've got an interesting but not essential book. (Also works well for flatting out curved Magic cards)

Grade: B-

Friday, October 18, 2013

"Scatter, Adapt, and Remember"

Scatter, Adapt, and Remember: How Humans Will Survive a Mass Extinction (Annalee Newitz)

I was really looking forward to reading this, and it starts out pretty well - the first half explores the history of Earth, and later the human race, with an eye towards various disasters over the years, and how species succeeded or failed to adapt and survive. I found this quite interesting, and I guess a little bit reassuring, in that the cataclysm that destroys 90% of life on Earth has already happened and paved the way for us. It'd be easy to recommend this book based just on the first half, but unfortunately once Newitz catches up to the modern day, the second half of the book starts and it's a complete mess.
First we hear about Newitz' favorite science fiction author for no reason I could see (unless Newitz really think that tentacle aliens from another dimension are going to come to Earth, I really don't see the point of including this part); then Newitz travels around from place to place, meeting with people who are working on future technology like a living city you can grow. This is frustrating because Newitz just scratches the surface on these ideas, never digging deep into what, for example, a living city would look like, instead telling us how the scientists who are working on these concepts dress or what they drink in the break room. I would also advise taking this entire section with a grain of salt - it all looked plausible enough to me when Newitz was recounting subjects I don't know much about, but when she got to the space elevator, which I have a little knowledge of, she comes off as wildly over-optimistic about the chances of it ever being built (there's a reason that the material at the core of the space elevator is often referred to as "Unobtainium"). Even if you can overlook this issue, none of these ideas are tied together; some of them are mutually exclusive, and they aren't shaped into a coherent whole, instead reading more like a list of all the places Newitz was able to get an interview.
So all in all, you've got half a stinker and half a good (not great) book; I'd recommend getting it out of your local library, reading the first half, and then returning it.

Grade: C-

Tuesday, October 15, 2013

"The Mark of Calth"

The Mark of Calth (edited by Laurie Goulding)

This is a short story collection following on from Know No Fear. Where Know No Fear was a pleasant surprise, this book is more of a letdown; despite contributions from some of the better Black Library authors, it's kind of a muddle. The book is brought down by the fact that a few of the stories don't really go anywhere. The first story is interesting enough but doesn't seem to really have a point or ending, and ADB's contribution (spoiler alert) is just a dream, which renders it completely pointless. Beyond this, the book also runs with Ultramarine fanboyism (at one point they kill 600 Word Bearers without a single casualty), and lavishes more attention on THE PERPETUALS, a weird new concept in W40K about people who are immortal because (loud cough) that doesn't seem particularly interesting or well thought out. The best short story is about a magic knife and is interesting both because it spans thousands of years and uses a weirdly refreshing second-person style where the narrator is telling you, the knife, about your own life. Otherwise, I'd recommend a pass on this; it's not the worst Horus Heresy novel out there, but it's not very entertaining.

Grade: C-